Life drawing final

This is our final second advert, after we filmed the draft we realised we had a few corrections that needed to be made which we feel we have met.

At the start we use an establishing shot with Kona walking into the building and asking the receptionist for directions, this immediately gives the audience some narrative which is something we realised we were lacking in our draft. The receptionist also tells her where to get changed which makes it clear why Kona comes out wearing a robe.

We wrote signs on each door and when Kona walks past she acknowledges the signs, which suggests she went into the wrong room due to her sight not because she was in a rush and was being careless.
The issue we had with the door we still slightly have but its now not so obvious, when Kona walks into the room she positions herself to the left which could be seen as her blocking the view of the window
however, if you are aware of this you will clearly see there is no window there at all.

Another criticism is that the sign on the door when Kona walks into the room is handwritten and then at the end of the advert it is printed.
When Kona walks into the bereavement group she is actually walking into a toilet and when she comes out we forgot to turn the light on which could be confusing, as she is meant to be coming from the corridor which would obviously have a light on, however i don't think its  obviously nor will it question
the narrative.

We were able to get more actors which creates realism as before there was only 3 people in the group and we wanted it to look as if there was a circle of people, when Kona runs in you first see the two women who look as if they have been crying- we smudged makeup around their eyes to create this. We placed the camera outside of the circle, which made it look as if there was a lot more people in the circle, you could see the side of Kates head, the shot after this then shows Kate and i looking very shocked and again we used makeup to create the impression that we had been crying before.

My favourite shot is the end shot, i think the use of the window creates professionalism, and is a great way to reveal the misunderstanding to the audience with them still being able to view the action.